[spoon-discuss] Re: [Spoon-business] (no subject)

[Daniel Lepage <dplepage@xxxxxxxxxxxx>]

On Tuesday, February 25, 2003, at 02:35  PM, Baron von Skippy wrote:

> Plot 3: Mark and Alex
> Mark is attracted to <girl's name>, but is too shy to ask her out. 
> Alex is attempting to help him with this, with a small amout of 
> success.
>
> Dialogue sample:
> Mark: I know I should just talk to her, but I'm flat out too 
> frightened.
> Alex: Come on, what's the worst that could happen?
> Mark: She could reject me, mace me, tell all her friends about me, 
> start an anti-me campaign, and leave me a pariah, leaving me to die 
> cold and alone.
> Alex: Fine, what's the second-worst thing?

I find the two occurrences of 'leave' at the end of the last 'Mark' 
line to be somewhat jarring; fix that and I just might vote for this :)

--
Wonko

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