[s-b] [auto] JessicaCooper submits p181

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JessicaCooper has submitted a new proposal, p181.

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Proposal 181/0: Going Grammatically Gaga
A Referendum by JessicaCooper
Last modified on nweek 94, nday 6

[[I just did something I've been meaning to do for a long time and went through the whole rules set with a fine-toothed comb.  There should be nothing at all objectionable in this Motion; I tried to put things that could be construed as objectionable into the other Motions I will be submitting shortly, because there is no reason that this should not pass.  And I don't think that the alliteration counts, as this is not a proosal.]]

In rule 1-2/2, put a period after the words “context of the game” and capitalize the word “that”.  Put a period at the end of the second comment in this rule.  In the last paragraph, remove the comma after the parentheses.  [[run-on sentence]]

In rule 1-3/1, insert a period at the end of the comment in the second paragraph.  

In rule 3-1/5, add a period at the end of each comment (paragraphs 2 and 7).  Add a period after “the number 10” in the second paragraph as well.

In the bulleted list in rule 3-2/1, replace all instances of “it” with {{e}}. Replace all instances of “It” with {{E}}.  Replace all instances of “Its” with {{Eir}}.
In the same rule, add a hyphen between “game” and “defined” in the last paragraph.

In 3-14/1, replace the second paragraph with:
{{
Once the Dictator has vetoed two proposals since e became Dictator, one of the authors of the proposals that were vetoed is chosen at random.  The Big Rubber Stamp is transferred to that entity at the beginning of the next nweek, and the new player becomes the Dictator.
}}  
[[This was confusing and had Spivak problems; all changes are basically grammatical.]]

In rule 3-19/2, under “Priest”, add the word {{it}} after the word “binding”.  

In rule 4-7/0, after the word “rules”, change the comma to a semicolon and add the word {{then}}. 

In rule 6-5/7, under “Zapping up to three Zones”, change the second sentence to read:
{{
When you Zap a Zone, you gain amplitude equal to half the number of tiles in that Zone, rounded down.
}}  [[“You” is good.  “A player” is also good.  However, consistency is necessary.]]

In rule 6-10/1, remove the period after the penultimate bullet in the second bulleted list.  [[A period after each bullet, no periods after any bullet, only a period after the last bullet, or periods only after bullets which are complete sentences are acceptable.]]

In rule 7-1/3, in the second sentence, change “their” to {{eir}}.  In the second paragraph, in the penultimate sentence, change “their” to {{eir}}.  In the last sentence of that paragraph, change “If they are not” to {{If the original owner is not a player}}.
In the first sentence of the third paragraph, change “Soul” to {{Souls}}  [[to match plural in players]].  In the other sentence of the third paragraph, change “eir Soul is” to {{their Souls are}}.  

In 9-3/1, paragraph 2, change the words “to the email address” in the last sentence to {{at the email addresss}}.

In rule 9-9/0, captitalize the first letter of the final comment and add a period after it.

In rule 9-10/0, within the parentheses at the end of the first sentence in the second bullet, add a comma after “for example”.  In the fourth bullet, change the words “they are” to the words {{e is}}.  

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